Hello my name is JAUME.JAUME LOPEZ MACUASE and i study at the LNS,it stands for London Nautical School.Today I’m gowing to tell you all of my stories .
My biggest fear’s are Butterflies once I went to Colombia for hollydays.they took me to the zoo in Cali (Colombia) and the part that I hated the most (El paraiso de las mariposas) inside everything was full of butterflies,I was trying to deflect the butterflies so they couldn’t touch me because I hate butterflies I was screaming “get my out of here!” I was running everywhere . Some guy said to him self what is that kid doings when I got out I was breathing heavli my cousin started asking me what happend to me .
I’m a Star Wars fun I haven’t wached Star Wars ep1,ep2,ep3,ep4, ep5 and ep6 the only Star Wars movie I have wached is Star Wars the force awakens my favourite charecter is anakin skywalker the actor’s are Hayden Christensen,Sebastian Shaw, Matt Lanter,David Prowse and Jake Lloyd.
Once I was running up and down the stears as fast as the flash until I triped and fall and broke my head It felt like a giant rock heat my head I was crying and I was bleeding There was blood every where. When my mum finished cooking and was going to get me to eat she founded me there in the floor with blood every where you my mum got me up and cleaned my head she saw a giant hole in my head.
After she sent me to the NHS they said I wad to go to Guy’s hospital in London Bridge.
June 6, 2016 at 4:09 pm
I’m sorry to hear about your unfortunate butterfly experience. How might you develop this idea further?
1) Be careful not to confuse ‘fun’ with ‘fan’ – re-read and edit your spelling throughout.
2) I know that you can punctuate your sentences but you have not done this in this piece. Remember to use a full stop to separate each idea and a comma to join ideas together/develop them.
3) Why does Star Wars appeal to you? Can you tell me anything about Star Wars that I might not know? What books have you read?